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Since airbags became popular, and children were moved from the front seat of vehicles with rear seat deaths of children left in cars hyperthermia significantly increased (NULL). The pages and pages of information, some solutions do not show the potential to solve this problem. offers educational materials Kidsandcars.org that parents can also conscious of the dangers of vehicles and unattended children that can help prevent future loss of children. The Ford Motor Company has added new security features that work directly for the safety of children in vehicles. The child created by BabyAlert alerts parents of children who were left in the vehicle Minder. Finally, NASA has developed a product called the Child Presence Sensor, which has the same concept as the childminder, but comes differently. Let us discuss these solutions and start working to solve this tragic problem.

I really hate my transitional sentence. Help please

Revise the entire paragraph.

You start well, but I suggest starting with an example of a recent death, or questions about how a parent would feel if this tragedy happened to him.

Add a number or percentage of the increase in deaths. Also add a date when the recommendations have begun to keep small children in the backseat.

Get rid of "through pages and pages of information." Do not use to solve and the solution in the same sentence.

Make your transition sentence to introduce each of these companies (which I assume you use in your body paragraphs.)

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Some companies have developed safety devices or information to solve this deadly problem. In considering possible solutions offered by _____, _____, ______, _____, and parents will get the tools they need to keep their children safe.


Then, make paragraphs on each company.

Your conclusion should restate the problem and solutions in a way slightly different from that which you have presented.

Good luck in your paper.

I would not say airbags are more popular. What is more common?

I think you have a lot of information in this brief paragraph ----
start entering the upper portion of infant mortality in cars --- quoting statistics. Then briefly describe the various solutions were offered. At present, this is more like a conclusion than an introduction. Hope that helps!

..... Equipment that can help make parents more aware of the dangers of leaving children unattended in vehicles, and help prevent tragic and unnecessary losses in the future.

Your introduction is very good, but you kind of wander off along a line of four, then pull them back together.
Hope this helps.